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The flowers nodded.
Snowflakes danced.
Thunder grumbled.
Fog crept in.
The wind howled.
The haunted house seemed to stare at me, beckoning me towards the door.
Technique 2: simile ( 明喻 )
Description/purpose:
Similes likens something to something else giving a more detailed description
Examples ：
The night sky was as dark as the deepest ocean.
The stars sparkled like diamonds.
The snake moved like a ripple on a pond.
Technique 3: metaphor ( 暗喻 )
Description/purpose:
Metaphors say that something is something else, giving the description more power
Examples ：
A wave of terror washed over him.
Technique 4:Vivid adjectives ( 生动的形容词 )
Description/purpose:
To make the story more interesting and vivid by using more imaginative descriptions , sometimes in a list
Examples ：
Gleaming, glistening, whispery flakes of snow
Technique 5: Negative description ( 否定描述 )
Description/purpose:
To tell the reader what is not there is an effective way of showing how unpleasant, comfortless a place is
Examples ：
There was no cushion, no carpet, no warmth, no light and no comfort.
Technique 6: Camera-pan and zoom (
摄影 -全景 +放大 )
Description/purpose:
To use the idea of how a film director works, you can give a wider view then focus in on one detail
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Examples ：
From the withering trees he looked past the littered farmyard, across to the decrepit hovel. Its doors hung sadly awry, the handle broken.
Technique 7: Nouns for details ( 细节名词 ) Description/purpose:
Scenes are filled with things that we see and therefore uses lots of nouns, even lists of nouns to convey what is there.
Examples ：
The rooms were crowded with lanterns fastened on oak paneled walls, tableslaid with silver candlesticks and goblets.
Technique 8: Senses （感官）
Description/purpose:
All of our senses become aware in a new situation or place. Your reader needs to know how your character are feeling.
Examples ：
Wafts of salt-laden air were in her nostrils as the skittery sand on her feet led her to the edge of the waves.
Good setting description for appreciation (
佳 “景 ”赏析 )
1. The house smelled musty and damp, and a little sweet, as if it were haunted by the ghosts of long-dead cookies.
2. The sun kept dipping down into the ocean and the lights came on at the harbor, casting sudden shadows on the ground, illuminating the faces that were just a second
ago silhouettes. The sky was golden and purple, the ocean a darker shade of violet.
3. The sun had set, but a faint pastel haze lingered in the mid-summer sky. 4. They rolled up the path, tree branches raking the windshield like angry wardens. 5. Outside, the air filled with cricket noise, as the sun reddened in its descent. 6. A restaurant overlooking a starlit night sprang to my imagination like something out of an illuminated manuscript from the late Middle Ages.
7. The moon went slowly down in loveliness; she departed into the depth of the horizon, and long veil-like shadows crept up the sky through which the stars appeared.
8. All brightness was gone, leaving nothing. We stepped out of the tent onto nothing. Sledge and tent were there, Estraven stood beside me, but neither he nor I cast any
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shadow. There was dull light all around, everywhere. When we walked on the crisp snow no shadow showed the footprint. We left no track. Sledge, tent, himself, myself: nothing else at all. No sun, no sky, no horizon, no world.
9. Night had fallen fast upon the land. No more than an hour ago the sky was painted with hues of red, orange and pink, but all colour had faded leaving only a matt black canvas with no stars to be looked upon.
10 ． It would be a cold moonless night. The sky was dark and low, the air so chilled it hurt to breathe. Already the ground was laid white with frost and any water that had been liquid under the winter sun had become ice.
后续写微技能 |氛围营造法之二
|3 大高潮营造法
1What is a climax of a story? （什么是故事高潮 ?） 文学故事中的
高潮（ climax ）---- 故事的 主要场景（ key scene）也通常是故事的
转
折点（ turning point ），是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时 候是剧情中的
\危机 \ 点。有时候 , 它只是达到关键时刻或者转折点
, 发生了一
些事情 , 或者主角必须做出决定 , 从而导致一个结果或其他。我们在分析叙事类
故事或者小说故事的时候常常用下面的图表来表示故事情节。
常见故事高潮示例： 1. A little
girl
has been searching for her lost dog. All of a sudden, she
hears a bark coming from around the corner, and she looks around to
see . . .
2. Kevin has worked very hard to try out for the soccer team at school. The
coach has posted a list of this year's team members on his office door.
Kevin walks forward to look at the list . . . .
3. Mary's parents have been discussing
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whether or not to move to
another state. They call Mary and her sister down to talk with them about
their decision . . .
4. Lois has performed in the state gymnastics finals. She waits anxiously
to hear the names of the winners. goes to . . .\
文学名著中的一些故事高潮
The announcer says, \first place
1. The deaths of Romeo (who kills himself because he thinks Juliet is dead) and Juliet (who kills herself when she awakes and sees Romeo dead). Romeo and Juliet, Shakespeare
（罗密欧和朱丽叶，莎士比亚）
2. When Gaston and the townspeople come to attack the beast, and Belle admits her love for the beast. Beauty and the Beast, Disney
（美女与野兽，迪士尼）
3. In \
third pig and the wolf. This confrontation is the climax.
（三只小猪）
)
2How to create a climax of a story? 方法 1.增加外部冲突
( 如何营造故事的高潮？
增加外部冲突 是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感
, 将
故事推向必要的解决或崩溃。 1）角色之间的冲突
(人物观点差异 , 竞争需要等 )
如：2017 年 11 月浙江英语高考： On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great
idea: Why didn't we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. 搭帐篷在他人后院
开车找旅馆 --- 徒劳无功 --- 母亲建议
---David 和我倍感紧张，心有不悦（母子的观点不一）
2) 角色与环境之间的冲突
如： 2017 年 6 月浙江英语高考： Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. ?? he saw instantly that it wasn't a dog at all , but a wolf: quickly catching up with him. Mac's heart jumped. ?? , he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute
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