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35 Lou‘s waitress, Stacy, has arrived, and begins taking orders and delivering meals. Lou alternates between working the grill and clearing tables. Mid-stride, he halts before the golden-haired woman at the counter, who has pushed her plate aside and is lighting another cigarette. ―What? What is this?‖ he demands.
36 ―Looouuu …‖ she begins soothingly, a stream of smoke jetting from her mouth with the word.
*suits: business executives or professionals (people wearing business suits).
37 ―Don‘t ?Lou‘ me,‖ he retorts. ―You don‘t eat your toast, you don‘t eat your potatoes, you barely touch your eggs. Whatcha gonna live on? Camels?‖
38 ―Awww, Lou,‖ she says, but she pulls her plate back and eats a few more bites. 39 As the rush of customers slows to a trickle, Lou returns to the register, making change and conversation, talking Phillies and the weather. One of the flannel-shirted men rises from his counter seat and heads for the door, dropping his money on the counter. ―‘Bye, Stacy,‖ he says to the waitress. ―Have a nice day.‖ 40 ―‘Bye, Mel,‖ she replies. ―You too.‖ 41 ―What about me?‖ Lou calls after Mel.
42 Mel doesn‘t pause. ―Who cares what kind of a day you have?‖
43 Mel disappears into the morning sunshine; the Camel lady pulls a crossword puzzle out of her purse and taps an unlit cigarette rapidly against the counter. Stacy wipes the tables and empties a wastebasket of its load of dark, wet coffee grounds. Lou butters a piece of toast and returns to his favorite booth. He spreads out his newspaper again, then glances up to catch the eye of the hot-sauce woman. ―Where‘s your friend?‖ he asks. 44 ―He left,‖ she replies. 45 ―He left you, eh?‖ Lou asks.
46 ―No, he didn‘t leave me. He just had to go to work …‖
47 ―Dump him,‖ Lou responds automatically. ―And now, if you don‘t mind very much, I would like to finish my newspaper.‖ Questions 2
About Unity
1. What is the thesis of Johnson‘s essay? If it is stated directly, locate the relevant sentence or sentences. If it is implied, state the thesis in your own words. _____________________________________________________________ 2. Which statement would best serve as a topic sentence for paragraph 13? Many of Lou‘s customers are, like him, interested in the Philadelphia sports teams. Lou doesn‘t mind if customers serve themselves coffee.
Lou apparently disliked the two men in oil-company caps who came into the restaurant. Regular customers at Lou‘s are used to taking care of themselves while Lou reads his paper.
About Support
3. In paragraph 3, Johnson claims that Lou and his customers are fond of one another. How does she support that claim in the case of the golden-haired woman who is first mentioned in paragraph 26?
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4. We are told that customers enjoy the unusual atmosphere of Lou‘s coffee shop. What detail in paragraph 25 supports this idea?
_____________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________ 5. Find a paragraph that appeals to three senses and identify those senses. _____________________________________________________________ About Coherence
6. Which sentence in paragraph 31 contains a change-of-direction signal? _____________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________
7. Which sentence in paragraph 23 begins with a time signal? (Write the opening words of that sentence.)
_____________________________________________________________ 8. The sentence that makes up paragraph 38 includes which of the following types of transition? time addition
change of direction conclusion
About the Introduction and Conclusion
9. Johnson begins with a situation that is the opposite of the one that will be developed. Rewrite paragraph 1 using another method for introducing essays explained in Chapter 4 : a broad statement that gets narrowed, a question, or a brief story. _____________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________
10. ―Lou‘s Place‖ ends with a comment by Lou that characterizes the mood of his shop. Rewrite this conclusion by using another method for concluding essays as explained in Chapter 4, summarizing the description of the shop or predicting something about the future of the shop or its owner.
FOUR BASES Checklist for Description About Unity
Does my essay have a clearly stated thesis, including a dominant impression? Is there any irrelevant material that should be eliminated or rewritten? About Support
Have I provided rich, specific details that appeal to a variety of senses (sight, hearing, smell, taste, touch)? About Coherence
Have I organized my essay in some consistent manner—physical order, size, time progression, or another way that is appropriate to my subject?
Have I used transition words to help readers follow my train of thought?
Do I have a concluding paragraph that provides a summary, a final thought, or both? About Sentence Skills
Have I used a consistent point of view throughout my essay? Have I used specific rather than general words? Have I avoided wordiness and used concise wording? Are my sentences varied?
Have I proofread my essay for spelling and other sentence skills, as listed on the inside back cover of the book?
As you revise your essay through one or more additional drafts, continue to refer to this checklist until you can answer yes to each question.